 From: 
Sent: Wednesday, December 02, 2009 12:54 PM
To:
Subject: Regarding Advisor/ Counsellors/ Experts that you need. Dear Sir / Madam,
I have attached my detailed profile with this mail. I wish to be a part of your team to help to the limit that I can. Please revert and acknowledge the receipt of the mail.
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CORRECT THE HYPERBOLE |
Preferablly do not use hyperbole. The words revert and acknowledge mean the same. Never address Sir/Madam, if you can help it.
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From:
Sent: Friday, December 11, 2009 12:25 PM
To:
Subject: Resume regarding job
Hi Ceo,
I am XXX done my B-Tech and having 2-3 years of experience.
Please find attached my resume and do let me know for various openings.
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SLOPPINESS IS WRONG ! |
Be precise. 2-3 years of experience sounds casual. And the writer messes it further by saying “various openings”. Shows you are disinterested. This is a sure reject.
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From:
Sent: Wednesday, November 04, 2009 7:49 PM
To:
Subject: ARE YOU THE BEST CARRER COUNSELLOR
IM AM XXX, AGED 50 YEAR, EXPERIENCE IN TEACHING OF HIGHER AND PROFESSIONAL CLASSES WITH ACADEMIC AND VOCATIONAL (FROM CLASS IX)
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ALL CAPS IS A NO NO! |
This is a good example of how not to write a covering letter. Writing in capitals alone is a sure ’no-no.’ Use grammatically correct language in sentence case.
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From:
Sent: Saturday, January 02, 2010 8:57 PM
To:
Subject: i wanna work Sir,
I have completed my graduation i the year 2009 and i wanna be a part of your advisory team, as i would be one would represent our ideas and thoughts.This is why i wanna be a part of your team.Hope u'll select me
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SINCERITY IS THE CORE ! |
The language is very casual. The candidate’s sincerity stands exposed. The careless use of English language and spelling mistakes makes it a terrible bore.
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From:
Sent: Wednesday, November 04, 2009 12:25 PM
To:
Subject: interested to explore possiblities of working - cv attached
Subject: Interested to explore possibilities of working, reference the notice in TOI, dated 4th Nov 2009
I am pleased to attach my cv for perusal and shall be happy to discuss further possibilities of working with your esteemed organisation.
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WRITE SUCCINCTLY ! |
You can never be pleased to attach your CV. The company must be pleased to receive the same. The tone of the letter is too patronising. It communicates a sense of misplaced confidence. The introduction line is too verbose. Do not repeat subject line in emails.
No employer will be ready to recruit a person with such a casual approach.
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From:
Sent: Wednesday, November 04, 2009 8:48 AM
To:
Subject: Fwd: resume
- Forwarded message -From:
Date: Sep 30, 2009 4:24 PM
Subject: Fwd: resume
To:
- Forwarded message -From:
Date: Sun, May 24, 2009 at 9:03 AM
Subject: reume
To:
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HORROR OF FORWARDING! |
This is the worst mistake one can do while applying for a job. The candidate forwarded his previous application to the current position. A sure way to be rejected. The correct approach will be to re-write the earlier applications to suit the present job opening.
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From:
Sent: Wednesday, November 04, 2009 5:07 PM
To:
Subject: CAREER COUNSELLAR
Dear Sir/Madame
It refers to advt. published in TOI regarding above mentioned subject.I am interested in your offer.I have attached my profile along with this.
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NO CLICHES! |
Do not write in clipped sentences. Mention clearly the reason why you are applying. “Above mentioned post” is a very old world and cliched expression, it is better that you don’t use it. “I am interested in your offer” is a presumptuous statement. You attach a CV or a résumé . ’My profile’ has a social media tinge. Best avoided.
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From:
Sent: Wednesday, November 04, 2009 11:06 AM
To:
Subject: Application for the post of Counsellors
Dear sir,
pls. find my c.v. enclsoed in
resposne to your advertisment.
i am from a pour background. sir please give me chance.
i have passed school from hosiarpur panjab. from rural bacground sir.
i request you to very kindly consider my application for any suitable position.
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NO CRAVENNESS! |
Do not speak about your personal circumstances. It immediately diverts the recruiter’s attention.
Giving unnecessary information about your school education is irrelevant. It clearly appears that the last line is a ’cut, copy, paste’ job. It is a giveaway that the application is doctored.
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From:
Sent: Friday, November 06, 2009 4:47 PM
To:
Subject: Application for Marketing Executive
Dear Sir ,
This is with reference to your Advt in Times of India dated 4th November 2009.
I am a postgraduate with MPhil, both of them with distinction and also served as Senior Research Fellow in University of Delhi.
I am interested in joining your organization.
I am also enclosing my CV for your kind consideration, Kindly consider my application.
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A GOOD PIECE ! |
This application has a good opening, briefly explains the candidate’s credentials, expresses interest and closes with a request. The only problem is that the candidate has applied for a marketing posiiton, which is not backed by any professional qualification or experience. So getting a look-in seems remote.
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From:
Sent: Thursday, November 05, 2009 1:10 PM
To:
Subject:
Sir ,
My name is dinesh kumar. i am science graduate and i did MCA later on . i am attaching my résumé with my all of the career apportunities .if you have a career for me please , consult me .
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RELEVANCE IS THE KEY ! |
This looks like a ploy to distract the employer so that the candidate doesn’t get any call letter. Write the letter in a standard format. Avoid bad English, wrong punctuation and incorrect spelling mistakes. Use capitals, where ever necessary. Do not use worlds like “consult me”.
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